The HMD Meme With Actual Constructive Criticism

[museboxy]

 

The HMD Meme With Actual Constructive Criticism

Wikipedia : Constructive criticism is the process of offering valid and well-reasoned opinions about the work of others, usually involving both positive and negative comments, in a friendly manner rather than an oppositional one.

[The Rules]

1. Post as the mun, and write down all your characters you would like to have any constructive criticism about.

2. Other people write down their crit about your RP-ing and your characters, etc, logged in or anon. Just praising people is fine, too.

3. No flaming or bashing allowed. No wanking, please!

4. Please keep in mind when you write your crit that your opinions may not always be right. Some things simply are a matter of individual taste, for example.

5. Please also remember that people are not obliguated to accept all and every crit sent their as valid. Sometimes it is, sometimes it isn't.

Comments

i have been waiting for this meme all my life.

[impossibled]

So, around here, I mostly just have:

impossibled | Oswin Oswald | Doctor Who
roseoftheunderworld | Eponine Thenardier | Les Miserables

And a few others, but those are the ones I'd like some concrit on, especially Oswin. I really just want to make sure I'm not annoying anyone with her.

Please be brutal!

[greatbigouterspacedunce]

YOU ARE NOT ANNOYING

No really, she's like my favorite character from the new seasons and from what I've seen you're doing fine. Especially since we haven't seen a whole lot of her, and you've still captured her personality and voice, I think.

yessssssss

[greatbigouterspacedunce]

greatbigouterspacedunce | The (10th) Doctor | Doctor Who | Example stuff
kleptosan | Kasumi Goto | Mass Effect 2 | Example stuff

I neeeed crit! I seriously love these two so much and want to do them justice, so anything and everything. Come at me!

[(Anonymous)]

people should link sample threads, just saying

[(Anonymous)]

That should be optional, IMO.

[uluithiad]

sam gamgee @ adstringendum

other dudes @ around

gimmie all of your crits

[wheeloffire]

Frodo Baggins @ adstringendum & somarium
HIT ME.

Okay um this isn't too recent BUUUUT this is practice I did because the Ring gives me lots of troubles okay
And also here's my HMD if you'd rather post there! But honestly I don't care either way

[atmagecamp]

atmagecamp | Henry | Fire Emblem: Awakening

Samples:
1
2

[little_lady]

I only play around here and occasionally on dear_mun (though not so much recently).

little_lady | Lady | Lady and the Tramp
lovably_awkward | Agent Phil Coulson | MCU
starlight_idol | Seiya Kou | Sailor Moon Stars

Lady's not so much trouble--but I thought I'd put her up their anyway. xD

Coulson's where I tend to get a little self-conscious. But every time I want to try and put this muse to rest, I just can't. I enjoy playing him too much--but I'd like to know what I can do better and maybe even what I AM doing well.

And Seiya's an old muse that I've been rehashing. Always room for improvement!

Come at me, bro. B|

[plunderful]

So, I play rabbitheartedgirl and I just want to say I enjoyed her thread with Seiya very very much; I'd definitely be willing to thread with you again.

Emmy

[righteously]

righteously | Dean Winchester | Supernatural (@ entranceway)
alifeordinary | Ordinary!Dean Winchester | Supernatural AU

damn_my_leg | John Watson | BBC Sherlock

I'm definitely the most interested in getting some concrit for Dean. Anything I can do to play him perfectly, please tell me. He's my main muse, so I really want to do him justice.

Also John is in serious voice test mode. So shaky, so new.

Some sample threads for Dean:

Game
Meme
Meme

[highfunctioning_sociopath]

Even though our thread was an AU, I think you've got a great start on John. Keep up the good work.

[roadblasted]

roadblasted | Turbo (Pre-Movie) | Wreck-It Ralph
Samples: here, here, here, here, and here! (SPOILER WARNING)
In particular, I'd really love some critique as to whether or not you feel Turbo's characterization works! Do you think his attitude / quirks / way of speaking / etc fits him at this canon-point? Do you have any suggestions on how I could improve it?

confectioncrown | King Candy | Wreck-It Ralph
Samples: here and here! (SPOILER WARNING)
Always nervous with writing KC and all his wonderful kooky mannerisms, so any kind of constructive crit would be greatly appreciated!

licoricewarp | Vanellope Von Schweetz (slight AU?) | Wreck-It Ralph
Samples: here! (SPOILER WARNING)
Vanellope is a very new muse for me, and even though she's slightly AU (she's actually just from the sequel to Sugar Rush, which is like the original but NEW AND IMPROVED and the characters have actual backstories), her personality is basically the same and I'd REALLY love any critique or advice on how to play her!

nomorebedtimestories | Agatha Prenderghast | ParaNorman
Samples: here and here! (SPOILER WARNING)
Even though Aggie is an important character in her canon, she only appears during the third act so again, I would really like some criticism as to whether or not her characterization is working!

[trainsurdragons]

(LOGGED INTO HICCUP IGNORE THAT)

roadblasted

I pretty much literally have...NO CRITS for Turbo actually? I mean he's PRETTY DANG PERFECT IMO. I'm not trying to be biased cause you're my friend- but I've seen a few other Turbo's and...I dunno yours is by far the best I'd say. Not only do you give him a fantastic life and personality, but you give him great character in his speech as well! The way he talks always makes me smile, and you just seem to nail every comment and comeback without a hitch. And owing to his canon point, it just seems to fit.

confectioncrown

NOW I AM GONNA BE BIASED A BIT AND SAY WOW I ADORE THIS GUY. You've got his voice nailed firmly into the ground and then some, seriously. And just- I remember seeing a thread between him and Felix, where he suddenly turned and got angry at him for a spoilery thing I will not mention, and the timing and way he did that was absolutely PERFECT. Just....wow, great job.

licoricewarp

For a new muse- ...you just- picked up on her really quickly. Vanellope is spunky and quirky so she can be hard for even ME to do sometimes, but I think you did really well with your intro post for her! I'm finding myself comparing my OWN Van to yours actually, because the way you played her really made me be able to hear her voice in my head. You did a great job with the way she speaks, and I love the little phrases she throws in every now and then (My CATCH ALL Phrase for Van is 'Good Gumdrops' APPARENTLY pfft, dunno how that happened). But yeah, I'm very impressed with how easily you picked her up. I'm trying to think of how I can crit since- I know I play her too but I'm bad enough at criticizing MYSELF-

So I'll give a bit of advice? ...sortaaa? UHM- Don't let her words get too tangled up when it comes to adding quirks or accents to her speech. Sometimes she DOES get super excited and starts talking a mile a minute, and then other times she does talk deliberately (Like, example, if she gets really serious about something, albeit rareish) IDK if I'm making sense, but sometimes I'll have days where Van stumps me up because I'm not sure if I'm warping her speech too much, or not enough, etc.

BUT YES these were Chi's two cents :3

[midnightmayor]

The only two muses that are really active enough for me to request crit on are:

Q (AU) | technosorcerer | Sample 1 | Sample 2

Matthew Swift | midnightmayor | Sample 1 | Sample 2

Q is massively AU and I've been struggling to keep his voice close to canon despite that, and would love feedback on how I'm doing and how to improve. Matthew is a much newer muse and is my first time playing straight canon in a long time, so any concrit on him is welcome.

[lyricalfaun]

I mostly play with Tumnus @ cityofariel, dagaz, and outer_divide. I would love any feedback on his characterization, especially if I need to work on something.

I also play Ripley 8 (monstermama) @ cityofariel and wouldn't mind any feedback on her as well.

[mayamali]

Where has this meme been all of my life?

I've got a shitton of characters, but I'm mostly just lookin' for crit on these guys:

yayntz_rayr_zhoh | Starscream | Transformers: Fall of Cybertron
Sample!

lovethathatch | Veser Amaker Hatch | Hanna is Not a Boy's Name
Sample!

throughtyranny | Megatron | Transformers: Prime***
Sample!
***This guy is definitely the most shaky of my voices, so commentary here would be the most appreciated.

I'll provide more muses if asked. uvu

[oedipusrat]

Megs seems fairly steady and constant, but I can see where one might have trouble doing anything with him; he's so obstinate as fuck. You do a good job of being perfectly menacing at suckup-scream. I can hear his voice in your responses, so that's an awesome start. I don't really see anything to pick at; big ego and grand sense of self, very threatening, allows Screamy to live when we all know that's a bad idea... I'd love to see him more in action or having some wordy poetic bitchfight with an OP.

[memoryguardian]

I only play this lovely lady here! I'd absolutely love any feedback on how you think I could make her better. Lord knows I worry enough already about how I play her but I just want to make sure people think I'm doing her justice!

mamatooth | Toothiana | Rise of the Guardians
@ havenrpg, adstringendum, and all over the place really.

Game Sample?!
I can provide other samples if people want, too!

[humanhero]

Ok so your Tooth
is pretty fab ok?

She is seriously the most ADORABLE THING I SWEAR. I personally think you do a wonderful job capturing her joyful, excitable, and gentle personality. And it's not just cause I ship her with Hiccup either.

I really hear her voice when you play her, I honestly do. And I love it when a player can do that so well- and YOU MY FRIEND, do it well.

[unstirred]

I've got:

unstirred | James Bond | Craig!Bond - He's been around for a while, so I'd love some crit on him if anyone's seen anything worth commenting on.

finifugal | Dr. Whale (Victor Frankenstein) | Once Upon a Time - This muse is brand spanking new, so anything would be helpful, even if I'm still really just starting to get him out there.

[(Anonymous)]

If you're not feeling a thread, it'd be appreciated if you gave someone a heads' up rather than just flaking out on them. I've seen you do it multiple times, and that's not cool.

TL;DR

[humanhero]

humanhero Finn the Human | Adventure Time
Samples: Here, here, here, and here!
I crave critique for Finn because he is my strongest muse. I really love playing him, but I worry sometimes about if I've got his voice down correctly- wacky catch phrases and all!

trainsurdragons Hiccup Horrendous Haddock III | How to Train Your Dragon
Samples: Here, here, and here!
Contrary to POPULAR BELIEF I am under the impression that Hiccup's voice is the shakiest thing ever so- helpful crits would be nice!

i_believe Jamie Bennet | Rise of the Guardians
Samples: Here andhere!
I don't see TOO many other Jamie's tagging around as...much as mine, so I'd love for some crits concerning him! Cmon Guardians help a girl out

notaglitch Vanellope Von Schweetz | Wreck-It Ralph
Samples: Here, here, here, and here!
Vanellope is one of my older muses, but I still worry about her- quiiite a bit. Especially when it comes to the way she reacts to things, and acts around certain people. So, thoughts?

AND I THINK THAT'S IT YEP

[roadblasted]

I FEEL SO BAD that I feel like I can't... really... talk about Finn, or Hiccup, or Jamie right now because I'm three seasons behind on Adventure Time and I've only seen How to Train Your Dragon and Rise of the Guardians once, SO. UM. IOU THOUGHTS ON THEM EVENTUALLY 8D;

But VANELLOPE. Oh gosh where to even START with Vanellope.
You actually made me realize things about the character that I didn't from watching the actual movie over and over again, and I think that alone really says something. But you not only capture her energy and quirkiness INCREDIBLY well, you just- UNDERSTAND the way she thinks and feels from like, every imaginable angle, at least from what I've seen from all the different situations she's been in so far. The detail you give to her introspection is wonderful, I'm always beyond fascinated and impressed reading it.
And of course I'd be lying if I said your Vanellope wasn't a huge factor in me developing my own muse for her, so yeah |D I've always loved her but I've grown to adore her a hundred times more since RPing with you. KUDOS. to say the least.

NOW AS FAR AS CRITIQUE GOES... I'm gonna give you a tip that doesn't specifically relate to Vanellope exactly, it's actually something I notice with your writing/RPing in general across your muses? Is that you use ellipses a lot. I used to use them a lot too but here's a trick I figured out that helps you know just when it's right to use ellipses to emphasize a speech break or not...
Actually read your dialogue aloud while imitating your character after you write it. I KNOW THIS SOUNDS SILLY but it is actually REALLY helpful, for me anyway, I do this for Turbo a lot. Pause for about a second for each ellipses and see if it sounds right spoken. If it feels like natural dialogue, like you're not pausing too much and its flowing, you're good! But if you're breaking too much and it seems choppy, that's when to cut ellipses down. This works for stuttering, too! When your character is stuttering for whatever reason and you want to know just how long to hold out the stutter. Pronounce the stutters and see what sounds right!

SO YEAH that's all I have to say for right now ;u; I hope it makes sense and is helpful in some way asdfghjkl♥

[twicehitting]

gotawarrent Bunnymund | Rise of the Guardians
Samples: here
I'd love some critique because sob I feel like I need to canon review.

cactusbutt Banzai | The Lion King
Samples: Here
He's a young voice and maybe there's some who will give me good crit

twicehitting Wolf Boss | Kung Fu Panda 2
Samples: Here
HE'S NEW SO yeah, I'd love some help there. I mean, am I making him too soft or what.

[(Anonymous)]

Can I just say that you are amazing for playing Banzai? And that username is just too perfect for him. Seriously, so much love. ♥

[mewtwowarrior]

wreckofaguy | Wreck-It Ralph | Wreck-It Ralph

wreckyeah | Wreck-It Ralph | Wreck-It Ralph (AU Hero's Duty Space Marine)

I'd love any and all crit on my Ralphs! I think one thing I'm having some difficulties with regular Ralph is the way he speaks, I'm having troubles figuring out if he has any speech quirks, he doesn't seem consistent with them in the movie. As for Space Marine Ralph, I'm always worried about the balance between Ralph and Space Marine.

I'm always looking for more advice, crit, and suggestions, I want to make sure I'm doing Ralph justice and playing him right.

THIS IS REALLY TL;DR I'M SORRY

[roadblasted]

So in the countless more times I've rewatched the movie as of late, I've started to realize how... I don't know if "deceptively complex" is the right phrase, but something like that where he's actually a lot more intricate as a character than he might initially seem, Ralph is. Being the main character he's probably the most relateable, along with Vanellope, but I notice all these somewhat subtle intricacies with him that can be very tricky to capture.

That being said, I think you've done an excellent job so far even so, you're unquestionably my favorite Ralph that I've seen, you put so much thought and passion into him and it REALLY shows!
But I'll point out a few things to keep in mind that'll hopefully be helpful in getting all his quirks down!

One thing that is difficult from the start with Ralph is balancing his brutish and temperamental side with his nice, caring side. While he is a fairly down-to-earth kind of guy, he is also VERY emotional and expressive, so don't be afraid to let Ralph emote! To even quote him talking about himself, "[his] passion bubble's very near the surface."
He does get angry easily, so it is okay to let him lose his temper and get harsh and snappy when you think there's a good chance he would. Because even though he is can really easily get pissed off he usually won't actually hurt someone, but he definitely may try to intimidate them. Good examples are when he frightened off the Sugar Rush racers when they destroyed Vanellope's home-made kart, and when he's chasing and basically scaring the crap out of King Candy right before KC gives the spiel about why Vanellope can't race. He starts by throwing something at KC, then chasing him, then picking up and tossing away the gumdrop KC is hiding behind, then he picks him up and snarls in his face. Ralph CAN do stuff like that if he really has a reason to.

Another thing relating to Ralph's expressiveness is something that actually impressed me even further about the animation in the movie, is that despite being a HUGE guy, he moves A LOT. He can even have very skittish movements at times (such as when Vanellope scares him when he's climbing the tree, and when he's avoiding the splashes from the Diet Cola Mountain hot springs), and in general he has a lot of body language. Like the silly way he moves when he's sort of mocking Vanellope going "Oh I'll just magically win the race because I really want to!" XD He does stuff like that when emoting.

As for the way he speaks... it's a bit difficult to put this into words so I don't know if I'm making total sense here, but Ralph is sort of... casual but blunt. He's not really rude (unless he's angry), but he doesn't dart around what he wants to say. He's somewhat unfiltered, you could say. Like when Zangief gives his share at Bad-Anon and Ralph is just like "Riiight... Sorry, you lost me there." So yeah again he's not harsh (again not unless he's really mad), just very straight-to-the-point most of the time.
Also... dang I'm not even sure how to correctly describe this but when Ralph is brought to King Candy's castle in the cupcake and they're meeting for the first time and KC introduces himself, Ralph isn't super polite to him or anything because he's apparent royalty, he kind of keeps the same attitude he does with everyone. He even kinda snarks at him, "I see you're a fan of pink."
So yeah even talking to a king, Ralph doesn't sugar-coat anything. Even when he's trying to encourage Vanellope he comes across this way, "Who doesn't love a brat with dirty hair?" So he's raw, but again not hurtful.

I'M SORRY THIS GOT REALLY LONG asdfhgjkl I just hope it makes sense and is helpful in some way 8D; Keep on truckin' with Ralph, you're already doing great with him and I think you'll get even better!♥

Goldude

[cape_and_wizard_hat]

My muselist is here. In case you want my stuff here...

gargleblasted

Fizz | League of Legends | tidal_trickster
Trixie Lulamoon | My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic | cape_and_wizard_hat

wonderfulworlds

Fluttershy/Fluttercruel | Pony POV | shy_kindness/cruel_kindness

Homeless

Changeling | My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic | allsfairinloveandvore
Dr. Dinosaur | Atomic Robo | somanycrystals
Evil the Cat | Earthworm Jim | minor_setback
Future Being Ledian | Pokemon Black 2 White 2 | evolutionize
Kebi | Savage Worlds/Pokemon Mystery Dungeon | snake_with_a_cape
Petitus | 1/0 | ininclntntwrds
Treguard | Knightmare | oooooh_nasty
Xavier | Xavier Renegade Angel | renegadephilosophy

[twily]

>Changeling

So it was YOU!

[begetsvengeance]

route_29

Jeane | No More Heroes | begetsvengeance

@theinstitute

Bad Girl | No More Heroes | batterthanyou
Alex Louis Armstrong | Fullmetal Alchemist | amajorham

@smashacademy

Celestia Ludenberg | Dangan Ronpa | trumped_card/liesthroughsmiles

@homeless

Kneesocks | Panty and Stocking with Garterbelt | kneescythes
RED Soldier | Team Fortress 2 | hates_hippies
Colress | Pokemon Black & White 2 | unknownfactor


Any advice at all would be appreciated, especially for Jeane, Bad Girl, Kneesocks, or Colress! They are my newest muses at the moment and I feel as though they could use some improvement.

Des

[roadroller]

@ wonderfulworlds

RIN KAGAMINE | VOCALOID [mayfield import au] | roadroller
MADAME FOSTER | foster's home for imaginary friends | battymadam


@ insertcoins

MIKU HATSUNE | VOCALOID [project diva arcade] | rhythmiku

Let me know how I'm doing with my characters! I fret the most over Foster so feedback for improving her would be extra appreciated. As well as Rin being from a CR AU, just how I'm doing in that respect. With arcade Miku I'm totally just winging it so anything goes....

[swinginreporter]

Notsomuch concrit as it is driveby compliments, but I love me some arcade!Miku. ♥ She's absolutely adorable!

Jack Harkness – Doctor Who/Torchwood

[forever_jack]

Well, if nothing else, at least we can know that the people who post in this meme are people you can trust to actually care about how they're doing! :-)

I only have this dude here for the moment but he's been pretty busy.

All threads linked here. Any concrit would be loved!

[(Anonymous)]

Implying that the people who choose, forget, or don't know to participate in this particular hmd meme do not as an overall care about how they're doing is a bit much. I don't know whether you particularly meant to come off that way, but regardless: you might want to look into how you present yourself OOCly.

[ellen_harvelle]

ellen_harvelle | Ellen Harvelle | Supernatural
soul_scatter | Kuchiki Byakuya | Bleach
thebetterweapon | Victor Creed/Sabretooth | Marvel 616
thelittlestbub | Jubilee | Marvel 616* @ cape_kore
southernreaper | Kevin Ford/Wither | Marvel 616
the_gardens_apple | Misa Almassy/Lilith | OC
vw_coyote | Mercy Thompson | Mercy Thompson books
bostonhowler | Brigid Finn | Teen Wolf OC

*I received crit about not tagging people in memes without PMing first. I started doing that. I do it with all my characters now. I hope that's resolved the issue.

[(Anonymous)]

we appreciate it. thanks for the consideration.

[luciferspromdress]

@ tartarusnet
John Winchester | didhisbest | Supernatural | Private HMD

@ museboxes/DRs/memes
Sam Winchester | luciferspromdress | Supernatural | Private HMD
Benny | thebloodbrother | Supernatural | Private HMD
Daryl Dixon | theonlyzenone | The Walking Dead | Private HMD
"Nice Guy" Eddie | heresthenews | Reservoir Dogs | Private HMD

... and all these guys too.

[recompiling]

I am so happy to see this meme you have no idea. Anyway, down to the character list...

captainofdespair | The Witch-King of Angmar | LotR | Sample

boot2thehead | Point Man | F.E.A.R. | Sample

namesnotprowl | Barricade | Transformers Bayformers | Sample

redshirtrobot | Fracas the Vehicon | Transformers: Prime | Sample and yes I know he's an OC I'd love crit on him anyway

recompiling | System Monitor Anon | Tron: Evolution | Sample

Pretty much the characters I've been feeling most tentative about lately. The Witch-King is super-new and is my first official trek into RPing in the Lord of the Rings fandom, so any tips on him would be especially helpful.

all @ bakerstreet and the_love_hotel

[seacups]

Sam Winchester | Supernatural | exorcising
Rapunzel | Tangled | daydreaming
Ariel | The Little Mermaid | seacups
Botan | Yu Yu Hakusho | ferries
Yukina | Yu Yu Hakusho | crylittlesister
Usagi Tsukino | Sailor Moon | tiare
Makoto Kino | Sailor Moon | denkou
Rei Hino | Sailor Moon | prediction

I can try to find samples if needed.