The HMD Meme With Actual Constructive Criticism

[museboxy]

 

The HMD Meme With Actual Constructive Criticism

Wikipedia : Constructive criticism is the process of offering valid and well-reasoned opinions about the work of others, usually involving both positive and negative comments, in a friendly manner rather than an oppositional one.

[The Rules]

1. Post as the mun, and write down all your characters you would like to have any constructive criticism about.

2. Other people write down their crit about your RP-ing and your characters, etc, logged in or anon. Just praising people is fine, too.

3. No flaming or bashing allowed. No wanking, please!

4. Please keep in mind when you write your crit that your opinions may not always be right. Some things simply are a matter of individual taste, for example.

5. Please also remember that people are not obliguated to accept all and every crit sent their as valid. Sometimes it is, sometimes it isn't.

Comments

i have been waiting for this meme all my life.

[impossibled]

So, around here, I mostly just have:

impossibled | Oswin Oswald | Doctor Who
roseoftheunderworld | Eponine Thenardier | Les Miserables

And a few others, but those are the ones I'd like some concrit on, especially Oswin. I really just want to make sure I'm not annoying anyone with her.

Please be brutal!

yessssssss

[greatbigouterspacedunce]

greatbigouterspacedunce | The (10th) Doctor | Doctor Who | Example stuff
kleptosan | Kasumi Goto | Mass Effect 2 | Example stuff

I neeeed crit! I seriously love these two so much and want to do them justice, so anything and everything. Come at me!

[(Anonymous)]

people should link sample threads, just saying

[(Anonymous)]

That should be optional, IMO.

[uluithiad]

sam gamgee @ adstringendum

other dudes @ around

gimmie all of your crits

[wheeloffire]

Frodo Baggins @ adstringendum & somarium
HIT ME.

Okay um this isn't too recent BUUUUT this is practice I did because the Ring gives me lots of troubles okay
And also here's my HMD if you'd rather post there! But honestly I don't care either way

[greatbigouterspacedunce]

YOU ARE NOT ANNOYING

No really, she's like my favorite character from the new seasons and from what I've seen you're doing fine. Especially since we haven't seen a whole lot of her, and you've still captured her personality and voice, I think.

[atmagecamp]

atmagecamp | Henry | Fire Emblem: Awakening

Samples:
1
2

[little_lady]

I only play around here and occasionally on dear_mun (though not so much recently).

little_lady | Lady | Lady and the Tramp
lovably_awkward | Agent Phil Coulson | MCU
starlight_idol | Seiya Kou | Sailor Moon Stars

Lady's not so much trouble--but I thought I'd put her up their anyway. xD

Coulson's where I tend to get a little self-conscious. But every time I want to try and put this muse to rest, I just can't. I enjoy playing him too much--but I'd like to know what I can do better and maybe even what I AM doing well.

And Seiya's an old muse that I've been rehashing. Always room for improvement!

Come at me, bro. B|

Emmy

[righteously]

righteously | Dean Winchester | Supernatural (@ entranceway)
alifeordinary | Ordinary!Dean Winchester | Supernatural AU

damn_my_leg | John Watson | BBC Sherlock

I'm definitely the most interested in getting some concrit for Dean. Anything I can do to play him perfectly, please tell me. He's my main muse, so I really want to do him justice.

Also John is in serious voice test mode. So shaky, so new.

Some sample threads for Dean:

Game
Meme
Meme

[roadblasted]

roadblasted | Turbo (Pre-Movie) | Wreck-It Ralph
Samples: here, here, here, here, and here! (SPOILER WARNING)
In particular, I'd really love some critique as to whether or not you feel Turbo's characterization works! Do you think his attitude / quirks / way of speaking / etc fits him at this canon-point? Do you have any suggestions on how I could improve it?

confectioncrown | King Candy | Wreck-It Ralph
Samples: here and here! (SPOILER WARNING)
Always nervous with writing KC and all his wonderful kooky mannerisms, so any kind of constructive crit would be greatly appreciated!

licoricewarp | Vanellope Von Schweetz (slight AU?) | Wreck-It Ralph
Samples: here! (SPOILER WARNING)
Vanellope is a very new muse for me, and even though she's slightly AU (she's actually just from the sequel to Sugar Rush, which is like the original but NEW AND IMPROVED and the characters have actual backstories), her personality is basically the same and I'd REALLY love any critique or advice on how to play her!

nomorebedtimestories | Agatha Prenderghast | ParaNorman
Samples: here and here! (SPOILER WARNING)
Even though Aggie is an important character in her canon, she only appears during the third act so again, I would really like some criticism as to whether or not her characterization is working!

[midnightmayor]

The only two muses that are really active enough for me to request crit on are:

Q (AU) | technosorcerer | Sample 1 | Sample 2

Matthew Swift | midnightmayor | Sample 1 | Sample 2

Q is massively AU and I've been struggling to keep his voice close to canon despite that, and would love feedback on how I'm doing and how to improve. Matthew is a much newer muse and is my first time playing straight canon in a long time, so any concrit on him is welcome.

[lyricalfaun]

I mostly play with Tumnus @ cityofariel, dagaz, and outer_divide. I would love any feedback on his characterization, especially if I need to work on something.

I also play Ripley 8 (monstermama) @ cityofariel and wouldn't mind any feedback on her as well.

[mayamali]

Where has this meme been all of my life?

I've got a shitton of characters, but I'm mostly just lookin' for crit on these guys:

yayntz_rayr_zhoh | Starscream | Transformers: Fall of Cybertron
Sample!

lovethathatch | Veser Amaker Hatch | Hanna is Not a Boy's Name
Sample!

throughtyranny | Megatron | Transformers: Prime***
Sample!
***This guy is definitely the most shaky of my voices, so commentary here would be the most appreciated.

I'll provide more muses if asked. uvu

[(Anonymous)]

"Just praising people is fine, too."

Means this will turn out like every other HMD and be a love meme under a different name.

[trainsurdragons]

(LOGGED INTO HICCUP IGNORE THAT)

roadblasted

I pretty much literally have...NO CRITS for Turbo actually? I mean he's PRETTY DANG PERFECT IMO. I'm not trying to be biased cause you're my friend- but I've seen a few other Turbo's and...I dunno yours is by far the best I'd say. Not only do you give him a fantastic life and personality, but you give him great character in his speech as well! The way he talks always makes me smile, and you just seem to nail every comment and comeback without a hitch. And owing to his canon point, it just seems to fit.

confectioncrown

NOW I AM GONNA BE BIASED A BIT AND SAY WOW I ADORE THIS GUY. You've got his voice nailed firmly into the ground and then some, seriously. And just- I remember seeing a thread between him and Felix, where he suddenly turned and got angry at him for a spoilery thing I will not mention, and the timing and way he did that was absolutely PERFECT. Just....wow, great job.

licoricewarp

For a new muse- ...you just- picked up on her really quickly. Vanellope is spunky and quirky so she can be hard for even ME to do sometimes, but I think you did really well with your intro post for her! I'm finding myself comparing my OWN Van to yours actually, because the way you played her really made me be able to hear her voice in my head. You did a great job with the way she speaks, and I love the little phrases she throws in every now and then (My CATCH ALL Phrase for Van is 'Good Gumdrops' APPARENTLY pfft, dunno how that happened). But yeah, I'm very impressed with how easily you picked her up. I'm trying to think of how I can crit since- I know I play her too but I'm bad enough at criticizing MYSELF-

So I'll give a bit of advice? ...sortaaa? UHM- Don't let her words get too tangled up when it comes to adding quirks or accents to her speech. Sometimes she DOES get super excited and starts talking a mile a minute, and then other times she does talk deliberately (Like, example, if she gets really serious about something, albeit rareish) IDK if I'm making sense, but sometimes I'll have days where Van stumps me up because I'm not sure if I'm warping her speech too much, or not enough, etc.

BUT YES these were Chi's two cents :3

[(Anonymous)]

And that's fine with me.

Praising people is part of good crit, too, you know.

[memoryguardian]

I only play this lovely lady here! I'd absolutely love any feedback on how you think I could make her better. Lord knows I worry enough already about how I play her but I just want to make sure people think I'm doing her justice!

mamatooth | Toothiana | Rise of the Guardians
@ havenrpg, adstringendum, and all over the place really.

Game Sample?!
I can provide other samples if people want, too!

[unstirred]

I've got:

unstirred | James Bond | Craig!Bond - He's been around for a while, so I'd love some crit on him if anyone's seen anything worth commenting on.

finifugal | Dr. Whale (Victor Frankenstein) | Once Upon a Time - This muse is brand spanking new, so anything would be helpful, even if I'm still really just starting to get him out there.

TL;DR

[humanhero]

humanhero Finn the Human | Adventure Time
Samples: Here, here, here, and here!
I crave critique for Finn because he is my strongest muse. I really love playing him, but I worry sometimes about if I've got his voice down correctly- wacky catch phrases and all!

trainsurdragons Hiccup Horrendous Haddock III | How to Train Your Dragon
Samples: Here, here, and here!
Contrary to POPULAR BELIEF I am under the impression that Hiccup's voice is the shakiest thing ever so- helpful crits would be nice!

i_believe Jamie Bennet | Rise of the Guardians
Samples: Here andhere!
I don't see TOO many other Jamie's tagging around as...much as mine, so I'd love for some crits concerning him! Cmon Guardians help a girl out

notaglitch Vanellope Von Schweetz | Wreck-It Ralph
Samples: Here, here, here, and here!
Vanellope is one of my older muses, but I still worry about her- quiiite a bit. Especially when it comes to the way she reacts to things, and acts around certain people. So, thoughts?

AND I THINK THAT'S IT YEP

[humanhero]

Ok so your Tooth
is pretty fab ok?

She is seriously the most ADORABLE THING I SWEAR. I personally think you do a wonderful job capturing her joyful, excitable, and gentle personality. And it's not just cause I ship her with Hiccup either.

I really hear her voice when you play her, I honestly do. And I love it when a player can do that so well- and YOU MY FRIEND, do it well.

[twicehitting]

gotawarrent Bunnymund | Rise of the Guardians
Samples: here
I'd love some critique because sob I feel like I need to canon review.

cactusbutt Banzai | The Lion King
Samples: Here
He's a young voice and maybe there's some who will give me good crit

twicehitting Wolf Boss | Kung Fu Panda 2
Samples: Here
HE'S NEW SO yeah, I'd love some help there. I mean, am I making him too soft or what.

[roadblasted]

(BUT WHY WOULD I WANNA IGNORE HICCUP?)

Re: Turbo
Thank you! ;u; This is always great to hear, since I could talk your ear off about my reasoning for playing Turbo the way I do and I have, I'm so very glad to know you feel it makes sense and that I'm on the right track with him!

Re: King Candy
AAH GOSH WOW THANK YOU SO MUCH ASDFGHJKL I'm just... so amazingly flattered you feel this way because I'm ALWAYS WORRIED I'm not doing something right with KC, even if it's just the way he lisps and giggles, I've even picky about THAT because I adore every single tiny minuscule bit of his character to death. And then the incredible way he's performed by Alan Tudyk in the movie?? Oh my god it's probably my favorite performance by any voice actor EVER in ANYTHING and IT IS SO NERVE-WRACKING TRYING TO CAPTURE THAT YOU DON'T EVEN KNOW
So thank you, really, oh man that moment you mentioned, Felix's mun from that thread complimented me on that same moment too so YEAH WOW I'M REALLY HAPPY THAT WORKED AS WELL AS IT DID APPARENTLY

Re: Vanellope
I LEARNED FROM THE BEST♥ AAH that is REALLY GREAT to know I'm actually getting that right with her already wow?!? Thank you so much for saying so!
THAT DOES MAKE SENSE I will DEFINITELY make sure to keep it in mind! There was points where I was unsure about that, so thank you! One thing I have been trying to be especially careful about is not letting her speech quirk overlap or become too similar to Turbo's. I try to think of Vanellope talking the way she does because she's young and energetic and excited, while Turbo's speech style is more because of the era (80's trends and the hedonism of the decade) and how that relates to his image and attitude, even though he's actually very smart.
So yeah I TOTALLY understand being stumped by that because I was unsure about it too, but what you mentioned is a good tip nonetheless~

I'M SO SORRY FOR THE TL;DR REPLY BUT YOU HAD AN EXCELLENT TWO CENTS THANK YOU SO VERY MUCH♥♥♥

[roadblasted]

I FEEL SO BAD that I feel like I can't... really... talk about Finn, or Hiccup, or Jamie right now because I'm three seasons behind on Adventure Time and I've only seen How to Train Your Dragon and Rise of the Guardians once, SO. UM. IOU THOUGHTS ON THEM EVENTUALLY 8D;

But VANELLOPE. Oh gosh where to even START with Vanellope.
You actually made me realize things about the character that I didn't from watching the actual movie over and over again, and I think that alone really says something. But you not only capture her energy and quirkiness INCREDIBLY well, you just- UNDERSTAND the way she thinks and feels from like, every imaginable angle, at least from what I've seen from all the different situations she's been in so far. The detail you give to her introspection is wonderful, I'm always beyond fascinated and impressed reading it.
And of course I'd be lying if I said your Vanellope wasn't a huge factor in me developing my own muse for her, so yeah |D I've always loved her but I've grown to adore her a hundred times more since RPing with you. KUDOS. to say the least.

NOW AS FAR AS CRITIQUE GOES... I'm gonna give you a tip that doesn't specifically relate to Vanellope exactly, it's actually something I notice with your writing/RPing in general across your muses? Is that you use ellipses a lot. I used to use them a lot too but here's a trick I figured out that helps you know just when it's right to use ellipses to emphasize a speech break or not...
Actually read your dialogue aloud while imitating your character after you write it. I KNOW THIS SOUNDS SILLY but it is actually REALLY helpful, for me anyway, I do this for Turbo a lot. Pause for about a second for each ellipses and see if it sounds right spoken. If it feels like natural dialogue, like you're not pausing too much and its flowing, you're good! But if you're breaking too much and it seems choppy, that's when to cut ellipses down. This works for stuttering, too! When your character is stuttering for whatever reason and you want to know just how long to hold out the stutter. Pronounce the stutters and see what sounds right!

SO YEAH that's all I have to say for right now ;u; I hope it makes sense and is helpful in some way asdfghjkl♥

[mewtwowarrior]

wreckofaguy | Wreck-It Ralph | Wreck-It Ralph

wreckyeah | Wreck-It Ralph | Wreck-It Ralph (AU Hero's Duty Space Marine)

I'd love any and all crit on my Ralphs! I think one thing I'm having some difficulties with regular Ralph is the way he speaks, I'm having troubles figuring out if he has any speech quirks, he doesn't seem consistent with them in the movie. As for Space Marine Ralph, I'm always worried about the balance between Ralph and Space Marine.

I'm always looking for more advice, crit, and suggestions, I want to make sure I'm doing Ralph justice and playing him right.